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"I've already got my results." Rigel shook his head. "I was cleared for this project weeks ago. You're mistaken." Rigel turned to walk away until...
 
"I've already got my results." Rigel shook his head. "I was cleared for this project weeks ago. You're mistaken." Rigel turned to walk away until...
 
I whipped it out. Boom. My tentacle. And just as suddenly, Dr. Carmen gave me the full san diego treatment, if you carmen-san-diego know what I mean. The great Dr. Carmen then squeezed her hair with both hands, which was gellin hard now, making a sound I can only describe as hair-gel-squirting, the fluid fell out of her hair and rushed onto the floor before me in a big splat, and, as the fluid hit the floor, we both looked up at each other and said, "Is this really happening again" at the same time. We both nodded our heads in unison. Then, in the wink of an eye, at the same time, we blinked back into reality, and the doctor continued, at the same time.
 
  
 
"No, Rigel. I'm sorry. There is no mistake." Dr. Carmen cleared her throat, and Rigel caught her subtle glance at his face.  She was struggling to maintain eye contact with him. "We actually did think there was a mistake, at first. Of course we did. I mean, you're immortal, yes?" Rigel nodded. "We thought, perhaps, we had mixed up your test results with somebody else's.  But we didn't, unfortunately. Mr. Veretis, there's no way to sugarcoat this. You've tested positive for the Blue."
 
"No, Rigel. I'm sorry. There is no mistake." Dr. Carmen cleared her throat, and Rigel caught her subtle glance at his face.  She was struggling to maintain eye contact with him. "We actually did think there was a mistake, at first. Of course we did. I mean, you're immortal, yes?" Rigel nodded. "We thought, perhaps, we had mixed up your test results with somebody else's.  But we didn't, unfortunately. Mr. Veretis, there's no way to sugarcoat this. You've tested positive for the Blue."
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This, more than anything, was the impetus of my tale, because if not for a chance transmission from my father I would have been left out...
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==1.7==
 
==1.7==
... At the request of my father I went to get a long overdue physical exam. The room was littered with vials, jars, and ampules of all shapes and sizes. Surgical instruments crowded the narrow shelves. It resembled (...). “Pardon the mess. We are in the process of renovating this facility.” The doctor was an older man, with dark orange skin. Spots cluttered his large, round face. He was a Belerion I believe. “I am...” The doctor interrupted, “you must be Rigel. General Vango talks about you all the time. He’s informed me to give you every test there is. The doctor paused for a second. “Where are my manners, I’m Doctor Condel, or Co-del’-ondel-o’ris if you have the patience.”  
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... At the request of my father I went to get a long overdue physical exam. The room was crowded with (instruments). It resembled (...). “Pardon the mess. We are in the process of renovating this facility.” The doctor was an older man, with dark orange skin. Spots cluttered his large, round face. He was a Belerion I believe. “I am...” The doctor interrupted, “you must be Rigel. General Vango talks about you all the time. He’s informed me to give you every test there is. The doctor paused for a second. “Where are my manners, I’m Doctor Condel, or Co-del’-ondel-o’ris if you have the patience.”  
  
 
It was strange to hear that my father talked about me. I always thought of myself as being a chore to him - an inconvenience that needed to be met every couple of years. But I knew he loved me, even if in his own way. And I did love him, in my own way. That is why I agreed to this ridiculous physical, to make him happy. That is why I agreed to take a ride on this ship, to leave home. “Dr. Condel, where do we begin and what did my father ever mention? Were you his doctor at one point?" His orange skin shimmered into another form, another color that was truly unique in only the way that fantastical things could show our eyes.
 
It was strange to hear that my father talked about me. I always thought of myself as being a chore to him - an inconvenience that needed to be met every couple of years. But I knew he loved me, even if in his own way. And I did love him, in my own way. That is why I agreed to this ridiculous physical, to make him happy. That is why I agreed to take a ride on this ship, to leave home. “Dr. Condel, where do we begin and what did my father ever mention? Were you his doctor at one point?" His orange skin shimmered into another form, another color that was truly unique in only the way that fantastical things could show our eyes.
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–Chapter 2 started–
 
–Chapter 2 started–
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==34==
 
 
I remember her eyes. Burnt ochre brown like rings of autumn. Saturn, maybe. The blackness of her pupil sometimes shone forgiveness, but could fiercely dance the opposite. One look at 'em and you forgot everything. Eternal. What are you looking at. She would gently smile. Nothing. (Everything.) Sorry. I watched them fade once. Last. It was the only time I cried in front of her, the only time I caved.
 
 
She knew I was all an act, I had the feeling and I'm never wrong about her and if she was here you could ask her. Am wrong about other things. Most things. I still did it though, stayed tough on the outside. She needed the solidity.
 
 
I thought.
 
 
Her eyes would frustrate me, but in this moment, here, they make a bit of sense. They help me navigate the dimension that is contradicted by what stands before me. Time. This memory. I brought it here.
 
 
I still remember her eyes. Burnt ochre brown like rings. The blackness of her pupil. Eternal. Everything.
 
 
 
There no space nor time nor light nor energy. Here. My thought, this thought, is the remaining dimension of all is.
 
 
Space. Its all gone. You won.
 
 
Time. If there were any remaining, it would be my own wrinkles. A countdown. A timer, coded within.
 
 
Light. A void remains. I see nothing, you've won.
 
 
Energy. Gone.
 
 
My thoughts.
 
 
All I can remember now is her eyes merged as one. They make sense now. I need not stare because I know, but I still do.
 
 
Each horse tail flare of brown light emitted outwards from the pulsatile ring of _demiurge_ shocks my entire consciousness. As if my frame of sight and windows of sensual observation, had they remained, all stop and start within 15 nanoseconds. Zap. Jolt.
 
 
The blackness of her pupil fractaled with vastness like 100 semi-transparent transparent layers of black on black plaid in an infinite mirror.
 
 
I wish I could hear my heartbeat. Not because it means life, but because - ah. Never mind. This is perfect.
 
 
Zap. Jolt. Another flare.
 
 
The ring is expanding. Not bigger nor wider, but more everything. Everywhere, now. Encapsulating.
 
 
 
I remember her eyes. The memory helps me navigate this vastness around me. They make sense now.
 
 
I remember her eyes. Burnt ochre brown like rings of autumn. Saturn maybe. What are you looking at?
 
 
Her eyes would frustrate me, but in this moment, here, they make sense.
 
 
Thought. The remaining dimension of all is.
 
 
I remember her eyes.
 
  
[would be a solid ending, if it can connect to the love story]
 
  
 
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