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I received a transmission from my father. He was a stern man who never minced words.  (better description). He held the rank of general in the League. At that time the League was new and they needed someone like him. The demands of the League were incessant, urgent, and my father saw them as a challenge.  
 
I received a transmission from my father. He was a stern man who never minced words.  (better description). He held the rank of general in the League. At that time the League was new and they needed someone like him. The demands of the League were incessant, urgent, and my father saw them as a challenge.  
  
I hadn't seen him in years. “Happy birthday, son. “ his long, stalky face looked stilted. I could tell he was worried. But he nevertheless tried to show joy.  
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I hadn't seen him in years. “Happy birthday, son. “ his long, stalky face look stilted. I could tell he was worried. But he nevertheless tried to show joy.  
  
 
“I will be passing through your sector, and was hoping I could (scoop) you up, so that we might spend some time together.”  
 
“I will be passing through your sector, and was hoping I could (scoop) you up, so that we might spend some time together.”  

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